Moko was going to Koro’s house which is in Wainuiomata to visit .He said he had a bone carving for moko. Moko’s dad started up the car Moko nearly burst into excited tears. When Moko got to Koro’s house, Moko was the first one out of the car. Moko had a peep through the window and he saw Koro sleeping with the bone carving resting on his stomach.
When Moko’s dad left to go home, Moko went to bed. He dreamed that the bone carving was stolen. He woke with a scream. Koro rushed into see what the problem was but when Moko saw Koro without the bone carving Moko screamed, “The bone carving is gone’’.
“No,no Moko I don’t wear the bone carving at night .Now go to sleep and have a good rest.”
In the morning after breakfast Koro took me down to the basement. Down there, Moko saw lots of carvings of people and some were made of green stone but the precious ones were made of bone. Koro picked up a bone carving. It looked just like his one except it was smaller. Moko thought to himself, “Is this the one he’s been saving for our family? ”Moko hoped that he trusted Moko and only Moko to look after it.
By Brandon Room 10
When Moko’s dad left to go home, Moko went to bed. He dreamed that the bone carving was stolen. He woke with a scream. Koro rushed into see what the problem was but when Moko saw Koro without the bone carving Moko screamed, “The bone carving is gone’’.
“No,no Moko I don’t wear the bone carving at night .Now go to sleep and have a good rest.”
In the morning after breakfast Koro took me down to the basement. Down there, Moko saw lots of carvings of people and some were made of green stone but the precious ones were made of bone. Koro picked up a bone carving. It looked just like his one except it was smaller. Moko thought to himself, “Is this the one he’s been saving for our family? ”Moko hoped that he trusted Moko and only Moko to look after it.
By Brandon Room 10
2 comments:
Your retell of this story contains all the main points of the story in the correct sequence. You have also used speech marks to show the words your characters said.
You have used some of the vocabulary that the author used but in your way to show your understanding of the story.
Well done on achieving your goals.
Mrs B
Hi Brandon,
This is a great story. I really enjoyed reading your recount of it. Have you ever seen a bone carving being made - it takes a long time, even just to get the shine on it at the end. They certainly are treasures.
Tsana (Karl & Robin's mum)
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